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Lone Star - Surprise - PL 8 Gold Hero

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Power Level: (8) (120PP)

Trade-Offs: +2 Attack / -2 Damage, +2 Defense / -2 Toughness

Unspent PP: 0

Gold Status: 0/30

In Brief: Kinda like Deadpool if he didn’t kill people and wasn’t insane, with a liberal dose of Kick-Ass.

Alternate Identities: David Kirk

Identity: Secret

Birthplace: Kingston, North Freedom

Occupation: Student/Superhero

Affiliations: n/a

Family: Robert and Kate Kirk

Age: 20 (DoB: December 5th 1990)

Apparent Age: 20

Gender: Male

Ethnicity: Wonderbread

Height: 6’

Weight: 170 lbs.

Eyes: Blue

Hair: Black

Description: David Kirk is a fairly average looking guy. He’d blend in with a crowd. He wears comfortable clothing whenever possible, and prefers T-shirts, jeans, and sandals. He has black hair that he keeps fairly short, and his most notable feature are his piercing blue eyes.

As Surprise, he wears a fairly typical ninja outfit: a cloth bodysuit with a hole for his eyes, but David had the costume custom made with Kevlar padding. He had two costumes made. The one he wears during the day is gray, and the one he wears during the night is black. He carries around two katana blades that he bought at a medieval festival, that he sharpens from time to time.

Power Descriptions: Surprise has the ability to teleport, which he attributes to dimensional warping. The teleporting itself does not make any sound, he simply ceases to be there and appears elsewhere.

History: David grew up on the streets of the West End, where he had to learn to fight. Being the smallest kid, he was always picked up and beat up by gangs. Eventually, he learned to fight back. Through the “study†of street fighting and taking any cheap shot he could take. He kept with this fighting style, and was soon invited to fight in underground fighting tournaments. He knew his family could use the money, so he accepted. During his first fight, he was doing really well. He had scored several small hits and was slowly wearing down his opponent when it happened. He vanished, and appeared behind his opponent. He beat his opponent down, teleporting when he was about to take a hit. Needless to say, this didn’t go over well. After being beaten to a pulp, he was thrown outside. He spent the next few weeks recovering, and had plenty of time to think. There were better things he could do with his newfound powers. He knew superhumans could fight street criminals. He was already trained in fighting…to a degree. He decided he needed a bit more of an edge than teleporting and throwing punches, so he bought two katana blades from eBay.

Personality & Motivation: After spending a lot of time fighting lower criminals and busting drug deals, David is ready for the challenge of facing real supervillains.

Powers & Tactics: The subtle nature of David’s powers allows him to get the slip on enemies and he tends to hide right in front of them. When they can’t see him, he uses his swords and really takes advantage of his stealth prowess. If he can’t sneak up on an enemy, he’ll often pull a stun gun on them, and get in a few shots. Although he’s capable of fighting without stealth, he fights dirty and will take any cheap shot he can take.


Phobia (David has a fear of falling from high places. If he is ever pushed off of a building, he will be unable to access his powers)

Abilities: 6 + 10 + 8 + 2 + 0 + 0 = 26pp

Str 16 (+3)

Dex 20 (+5)

Con 18 (+4)

Int 12 (+1)

Wis 10 (+0)

Cha 10 (+0)

Combat: 8 + 20 = 28pp

Initiative: +5

Attack: +4 (+10 Melee)

Grapple: +7

Defense: +10 (+10 Base, +0 Dodge Focus), +5 Flat-Footed

Knockback: -0

Saving Throws: 4 + 5 + 8 = 17pp

Toughness: +6 (+4 Con, +2 [Other])

Fortitude: +8 (+4 Con, +0)

Reflex: +10 (+5 Dex, +5)

Will: +8 (+0 Wis, +8)

Skills: 16r = 4pp

Drive 5 (+10)

Knowledge (History) 6 (+7)

Notice 10 (+10)

Search 8 (+9)

Stealth 3 (+8)

Feats: 24PP

Attack Focus (Melee) 6

Defensive Roll

Equipment 4


Hide in Plain Sight

Improved Critical (Stun Gun)

Improved Critical (Sword) 2

Luck 2

Skill Mastery (Drive, Notice, Search, Stealth)

Stunning Attack

Name (power breakdown [if applicable]) [Xep]

Stun Gun (Stun 7) [14], Camo Clothing (+5 stealth during the night) [1], Camo Clothing (+5 stealth in urban environments) [1], Undercover Shirt (+2 Toughness) [3]

Powers: 12 + 10 = 22PP

Teleport 5 (dimensional shifting]; dimensional; Power Feats: (Change Direction,Change Velocity,Progression (Mass,2 Steps), Subtle, Turnabout)

Power Loss (Dimensional; Frequency: [uncommon]; Uncommon: [Minor]) [1pp]

Dual Katana Blades, easy to lose 18p

Strike 3 Extras:Autofire; Power Feats: Mighty, Precise, Split Attack) [Xdp]

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In Brief: Kinda like Deadpool if he didn’t kill people and wasn’t insane, with a liberal dose of Kick-Ass.

A) Since "insane" and "kills people" are two of Deadpool's core, defining traits, removing them leaves you with... what, exactly?

B) You do realize Kick-Ass isn't a superhero comic/movie, right? And, as such, isn't the best thing to use as a basis for a char intended for use here?

Some of your coding needs cleaning up.

Explain the Power Loss and Vulnerability (Dimensional) things, please.

I'd also like to see more about his personality fleshed out. As in, anything about his personality... at all. As he is now, he was a scrawny kid who learned to fight dirty, got so good he was picked up by local underground fighters, did well for himself but kicked out when his powers manifested, and decided to become a hero b/c that way he could keep beating up people. That's... not hero material. At all. He has nothing driving him except a love of/desire to do violence.

Maybe make him more like Spider-Man, but with teleportation power instead of spider-powers?

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