Paragon

My character would most likely be there as a consumer. It sounds just like the place a poor College student would go for fun at a low expense.

If there is room I just got my first character Quintessence approved. I am up for anything if there is room.

Ok, So I fixed the formatting error in Density and brought it in line with the format you have. I found an error with the skills and fixed that so the math is right there. I fixed the formatting with the saves, so it states where the bonus comes from if it is not from directly buying it of a stat. I fixed the addition on the stats so it is correct. Were there any other formatting errors? I have one question about Density. I have some skills like Immovable I put the bonuses from density into the powers. Should I list those separately? If so where should I list them?

So can anyone see any other areas where this sheet is lacking? I have to say you guys are good at finding any small flaw. That is what I call detail oriented. I have been looking at this sheet for weeks and I have missed all the things you have brought to my attention. As always thanks for looking.

what kind of note would i need to put under toughness? Would I just write it next to toughness that it comes from density?

Hey Supercape I took a look at the toughness, and saw that you are right. The 28/30 must have been from n earlier version that I forgot to remove. I ended up adding the permanent modifier to the density after looking at the different choices. Thanks for the heads up on that.

Well that's one approval. Anyone else want to take a loom and see if there are any problems or approve it? That would be swell.

So how do you all think he looks. I Would like to get any issues with his resolved, and get him in play. Are there any issues anyone can see?

Ok, I made those changes you suggested. I took out immunity to will and gave him a good will save instead. I used those points to upgrade his abilities and skills to make him more well rounded. I gave him a new description for a more heroic looking costume. I have triple checked the points. I am fairly sure they are right, but there may be a few formatting errors that I have not caught or that you may like displayed differently here. If you have any other suggestions let me know.

made those changes.

Player Name: Paragon Character: Quintessence Power Level: 11 (158/162PP) Trade-Offs: -2 Attack / +2 Damage Unspent PP: 4 Progress To Bronze Status: 12/30 In Brief: James Roderick gained his powers when he rescued an alien from a crashed spaceship. The alien called himself a preserver and thanked him by pushing him to the peak of human evolution. At the end of the process he became Quintessence. Alternate Identity: James L. Roderick Identity: Secret Birthplace : New Haven, Connecticut Occupation: Student; Sophomore, Freedom City University Affiliations: None Family : Father: Robert Roderick, Deceased Mother: Katherine Roderick, Deceased Sister: Jennifer Roderick, Alive Age: 22 (DoB: March 8, 1989) Gender: Male Ethnicity: Caucasian Height: 6’3†Weight: 480 lbs Eyes: Blue Hair: Brown Description: Quintessence is a solidly built man several inches over average height, and is very heavily muscled. For such a large man he moves with a grace that many dancers would envy. Quintessence has light brown hair shorn close to his head and pale blue eyes. When in costume Quintessence favors pale blue sleevless tights. He has a dark grey leather cape that come down to the back of his knees and a jerkin made of the same material. He also wears heavy black boots and a reflective visor covering his eyes. Power Description : Quintessence’s powers are an extension of his natural abilities. He was enhanced by an alien race called the Preservers when he saved the life of one after a spaceship crashed on earth. The Preservers told Quintessence that he was using genetic manipulation to accelerate his evolution. While the results are unpredictable from human to human they always produce a being of extraordinary powers. In the case of Quintessence it greatly increased his strength and constitution. It also gave him the ability to defy gravity. His skin looks the same, but is much harder. It is able to deflect most damage. Mentally few things changed for him other than a heightened resistance to influence. History : James Roderick grew up just outside of New Haven Connecticut. His father was a New Haven Police officer. His mother was a theoretical physicist working for Yale university. James has a sister two years younger than himself. He is highly protective of his sister. She is the only family he has left. Growing up the family often went on family vacations. Their favorite was always camping. Once a year the family would go to Maine and go camping on some land the family owned in the wilderness. It was on one such outing on the summer before his freshman year of school at FCU that James’s life changed forever. While James and Jennifer were hiking through the woods they saw something that looked like a shooting star in the sky. As they watched the sky the object got larger. After a few minutes they realized that it was not a shooting star but something crashing to the ground. Thinking it was a plane crash James told his sister to run to the road and try and get a cell phone reception. James then went back to the campsite. While he was on his way back through the woods he lost sight of the object and several seconds later he heard a crash. When he reached his camp site he found a smoking ruin with no sign of his parents. He rushed into the wreckage looking for any sign of life. While searching through the site James found a body covered in soot and ash. Picking the body up, he carried them out of the flaming debris. Only moments later there was a large explosion. James and the person he had rescued were thrown clear. James carried the form to safety only after he put him down by the shore of the lake did he realize the form was not a human being. The form in front of him was an alien. He had never seen anything like it. At that moment the creature opened its eyes. “I thank you for saving my life human†it said directly into his mind. “It is rare in the universe a being shows a concern for another being without thinking of the consequences to themselves. I am of a race called the Preservers. We have long been absent from this place. I cannot undo the harm I may have done in the crash, but I can reward you†said the creature. That was when it took something out of a pouch at its hip. It then stabbed James in the shoulder, and everything went dark. When James woke he was in a hospital bed. Jennifer was sitting in a chair next to him. She was asleep. The sun was low in the sky outside. James sat up and groaned every part of his body hurt. When he groaned his sister woke up. That was when he learned that his life would never be the same. His parents were dead. The police had told Jennifer that a small private plane had been hit by lightning and crashed into their campsite. James took up the roll of Quintessence to continue the work his father felt so strongly about, to protect the innocent and punish the guilty. Personality & Motivation : James took on the persona of Quintessence soon after he started his sophomore year at FCU. Quintessence fights for justice and to protect the innocent. James had idolized his father for going out every day and risking his life to help people. Without any powers his father had gone out into a world with supervilians, Aliens and other unknown threats every day. Once James realized he had these powers he felt he had no choice but to continue his father’s work. Every time he has a moral dilemma he thinks about the values his father instilled in him. As long as he lives by that he will never be lost. Powers & Tactics : Most of the time Quintessence is very straight forward. He is direct to a fault. He dislikes subterfuge, and takes obstacles head on. Complications : Struggling: James Roderick is a poor college student struggling to make ends meet. Relationship: James Lives with his sister Jennifer who does not know about his powers. Secret: Identity Abilities : 18 + 10 + 18 + 2 + 4 + 2 = 54PP Strength: 28/34 (+9/+12) Dexterity: 20 (+5) Constitution: 28 (+9) Intelligence: 12 (+1) Wisdom: 14 (+2) Charisma: 12 (+1) Combat : 8 + 10 = 18PP Initiative: +5 Attack: +8 Melee, +4 Ranged, Unarmed +10 Grapple: +20/+26 Defense: +10 (+5 Base, +5 Dodge Focus), +5 Flat-Footed, Knockback: -10/-12 with immovable Saving Throws: 0 + 1 + 5 + 8= 14PP Toughness: +10 (+9 Con, +1 Density [+10 Impervious]) Fortitude: +10 (+9 Con, +1) Reflex: +10 (+5 Dex, +5) Will: +10 (+2 Wis, +8) Skills: 24R = 6PP Acrobatics 6 (+10) Physical Science 6 (+7) Notice 6 (+8) Sense Motive 6 (+8) Feats : 14PP Attack Focus (melee) 4 Attack Specialization (Unarmed) 1 Dodge Focus 5 Fearless Move-by-action Power Attack Uncanny Dodge (Sight) Equipment : 0PP Powers: 9 + 12 + 1 + 13 + 9 + 8 = 52PP Density 3(Extras: Permanent ) [9PP] (+6 Str, Immovable 1, Protection 1 [impervious], Super Strength 1) (Hard Body) Flight 6 (Flight, 500 mph, 4400 ft/rnd) [12PP] Immovable 1 (Total Immovable 2, [Resist Movement +8, Knockback -2]) [1PP] Immunity 13 (Fatigue Effects, Poison, Suffocation, all Environmental Conditions)[13pp] Impervious Toughness 9 (Impervious Toughness) [9PP] (Thick Skin) Super Strength 5 (Super Strength, Effective Strength 49 Heavy Load 11.2 Tons) [8PP] DC Block Abilities (54) + Combat (18) + Saving Throws (14) + Skills (6) + Feats (14) + Powers (52) - Drawbacks (0) = 158/162 Power Points