Ecalsneerg

Right, I've got a few things here. I'd like to preface it with that everyone has issues with their first sheet, I listed them to help you fix it, not make you feel bad, and it looks much longer than there are actually errors, because a lot of this is explaining how to fix those errors.

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Thanks a lot to EternalPhoenix for helping me with the character build! I have no idea what the Trade-Offs required for this app are, but just tell me and I'll edit them in.
 

Equipment: Leaving this area here because I will be getting the trait later down the line, but not yet...

Firstly, can you remove any commentary like this from the build? This, and tags like 'probably wrong', etc don't really help, this sheet is meant to be an in-play reference for the character and their backstory. I edited your tags, so you'll just need to get rid of the commentary. Similarly, we don't give a damn if you will buy Equipment until you do buy it.

Description looks good, although I'd ask you change Ethnicity. American doesn't tell us if he's white, black, Asian, Native, etc. 

I'd expand on the history a bit, as it's a little short. We also don't like especially ambiguous backstory. Remember, just because the character doesn't know, and those threading with him don't know, doesn't mean that we, the Refs, shouldn't know. If you're really set on not revealing it, maybe include a reason why he, and only he, was affected, or if indeed it was only him? If he's close with his sister, maybe include some of his family life? Really, just my thoughts on it are it could stand to be a little longer, I'm not getting who this guy is or what he's about from it. Angrydurf also pointed out to me late 1993 is an auspicious time to be born in Freedom City. He'd be among some of the first kids to be born in the months followed the city's invasion by Omega and the Terminus.

For the sheet, I ask that you follow the formatting a little more stringently. The blue parts are meant to be removed, the black parts are meant to be kept in, albeit with edited values. So, say, it should be: 

Abilities: 0 + 2 + 0 + 10 + 4 + 4 = 20PP

Strength: 10 (+0)
Dexterity: 12 (+1)
Constitution: 10 (+0)
Intelligence: 20 (+5)
Wisdom: 14 (+2)
Charisma: 14 (+2)

Your maths is correct on Abilities, though.

Similarly, your pp maths for Combat is correct. However, you should omit the blue and include the base Attack value. Additionally, your knockback should include your unpowered value, and has an issue I'll get to in the Powers section. Thus it should be:

Combat: 8 + 8 = 16PP
Initiative: +1
Attack: +4 Base, +8 Ranged
Defense: +8 (+4 Base, +4 Dodge Focus), +2 Flat-Footed

Grapple: +4
Knockback: -11/-0

The same applies for Saving Throws. Maybe make Toughness look a little neater, like  Toughness: +12/+0 (+0 Con, +12 Force Field [Impervious Toughness 10])

Skills, please list them in a list format, not on one line. And additionally, it should be Skills: 56r = 14PP

Feats add up, but please bold and underline the heading, and as mentioned, you don't need Equipment if you don't have Equipment.

Powers, a few issues here. Firstly, review the template again for what they should be looking like. 

Can you list the speed for Flight so people don't need to reference. So. Flight 5 (250MPH) [10PP] (genetic)

Your Force Field doesn't add up. Firstly, per our House Rules, you can only have Impervious Toughness 10. This is fine on Force Field 12, you can buy it as a partial Extra, and only pay for it on the first 10 ranks of Force Field. The other problem is that Impervious Force Field costs twice that. Force Field 10 (Extras: Impervious 10) is 22pp, not 12pp. If you don't want to make too many radical changes to it, you can just scrap Impervious, and just have an above average Toughness save, which still works! Then your Knockback would be -6/-0. Or you could pay the extra, and it'd be -11/-0.

Your main power... basically, you don't need all 4 Elemental Controls. Fire Control is just Move Object (2pp/rank) with an Extra upgrading its range to Perception from Ranged for +1pp/rank, and including a Limited Flaw to 'only fire' for -1pp/rank. Which means... you could just buy Move Object and in fact should do so, as it's not really a Flaw. Your Move Object can move other things if you expend a free action to change which power in your array you're using. You don't necessarily need it to be Perception range, keeping it as its default 2pp/rank Ranged version can work just as well.

Variable Descriptor rank 1 would cover water/fire/air/earth, don't worry about buying rank 2.

And beyond those, your array formatting is a little bit off. It's a 26pp Array which costs 30pp (you don't include the cost of the Alternate Powers in the size of the array). Under my proposed changes, it'd be:

Elemental Abilities Array 12.5 (25pp array, Power Feats: Alternate Power 1) [26PP]

• BP: Blast 12 (Power Feats: Variable Descriptor [4 elements]) [25PP] (elemental blast)
• AP: Move Object 12 [24PP] (elemental control)

Amidst the white flashes over their vision and the streaked, smudged tears, the men could see a dark shape run to the edge of the building and leap off it towards them, cape streaming behind it like the wings of an avenging angel. It didn't make a sound hitting the ground, landing smoothly and without losing speed. Arrowhawk roared loudly with fury, a pealing cry that pierced through the night air. 

She hit the first man at around thirty miles an hour, kneeing him in the stomach and letting herself be propelled forward by her own momentum, slamming the man down into the ground. Lunging upright, Arrowhawk snapped out a heavy one-two to her right, before pivoting to deliver a crushing roundhouse kick to her left. Contemptuously backhanding a man to the floor, she pulled her bow from her hip and snarled at the remaining men. "Did you not come here to give me a fight?"

She's just going to go nuts on them unarmed with Takedown Attack.

Move Action: Leaping! Jump off that damn rooftop!

Standard Action: CHARGING Power Attack! For a net -2 Defence, +2 DC. Taking 10 to hit gives her 20, and lays out DC23 Toughness saves for everyone hit. She only has Takedown Attack 1, not 2, so she won't be able to take out all 10 men, probably.

Surged Standard Action: She rolls to Intimidate the guys. BOOGA BOOGA: 1d20+10 11
And does a terrible job. Oh well.

Battlesuit
Power Level: 10 (150/150PP)

Trade-Offs: None

In Brief: Big man in a suit of armour

"I'm bringing the party to you."

Powers & Tactics:

Well, the powers are pretty obvious. You're in a big-ass metal suit with a load of guns. The missiles are below PL, but that just means you can wipe out the mooks before smashing the leader with energy bolts and super-strength. Or use the flamethrower. You can fly fast, or lift literal tonnes, but you struggle to do both at once due to the dynamic array. You've got a load of cool senses inputting data, you can communicate on radio waves, and I assume there's also some nice climate control in there.

Outside the suit, you're 'just' a very smart, very inventive person with the constitution of a heavy drinker. Maybe over time you'll build yourself up so you've got higher Strength and combat stats in your normal identity, but until then, you just have to hope that if you're caught out of the suit in a fight, you can get to it fast. You've also got pretty rubbish exotics to begin with because you didn't particularly train up, you spent all your time building your fifth giant machine gun.

Complications:

Scratch In The Paintwork: The thing about a Battlesuit is that while it's good that it's getting smashed up instead of your frail, squishy human body, all your superpowers are in it. Maybe you can't see your HUD after a Dazzle attack blinded you, and can't access your Super-Sense data. Maybe your arm cannon's jammed after the super-strong villain crushed your bracer. Maybe a stray missile destroyed your rocket boot. 

Customisation:

The Battlesuit is a very customisable archetype. You can do a lot with it. Want a faster, less armoured suit? You can do that. A slow, clunky suit with bigger guns and armour, but less flight and definitely no ability to dodge? You can do it. Enchanted armour hewn by dwarven crafts at Odin's behest instead of in a corporate lab? Very doable. You can also customise the pilot a lot. This build assumes the billionaire playboy genius philanthropist, but why not the military pilot? The kid donning his grandfather's old prototype? The archaeologist who unearthed an ancient Greek artifact in a cave? You can go a lot of places with the battlesuit, with the pilot and the suit being radically different, and the archetype still being entirely recognisable. 

Abilities: 0 + 0 + 8 + 10 + 0 + 4 = 22PP
Strength: 30/10 (+10/+0)
Dexterity: 10 (+0)
Constitution: 18 (+4)
Intelligence: 20 (+5)
Wisdom: 10 (+0)
Charisma: 14 (+3)


Combat: 8 + 8 = 16PP
Initiative: +0
Attack: +10 Blast, +10/+4 melee, +8/+4 Base
Defense: +10/+4 (+4 Base, +6 Shield), +2 Flat-Footed

Grapple: +20/+6, up to +30 with Super-Strength
Knockback: -10/-2


Saving Throws: 3 + 5 + 6 = 14PP
Toughness: +10/+4 (+4 Con, +6 Protection [Impervious 10])
Fortitude: +7 (+4 Con, +3)
Reflex: +5 (+0 Dex, +5)
Will: +6 (+0 Wis, +6)
 

Skills: 60R = 15PP

Computers 10 (+15, ^{Skill Mastery})

Craft [Electronic] 10 (+15, ^{Skill Mastery})

Craft [Mechanical] 10 (+15)

Disable Device 10 (+15, ^{Skill Mastery})

Knowledge [Technology] 10 (+15, ^{Skill Mastery})

Notice 10 (+10)

Feats: 6PP

Benefit (Wealth 2)

Inventor

Luck 2

Skill Mastery (Computers, Craft [Electronic] Disable Device, Knowledge [Technology])

Powers: 81PP

All powers have the Technology descriptor

Device 20 (100 Power Points, Flaws: Hard to Lose, Power Feats: Restricted [Int 20+]) [81PP] (cool suit of armour)

Armored Weaponry Array 10.5 (21PP Array, Power Feats: Alternate Power 3) [24DP]

• BP: Enhanced Strength 20 [20PP] (servo-motors)

• AP: Blast 10 (Power Feats: Accurate) [21PP] (energy blasts)

• AP: Blast 10 (Extras: Area - Cone, Flaws: Range - Touch) [21PP] (flamethrower)

• AP: Blast 7 (Extras: Area - Burst) [21PP] (missile launcher)

Thrust Ratio Array 6 (24PP array, Power Feats: Dynamic, Dynamic Alternate Power 1) [27DP]

• DBP: Flight 6 (up to 500 MPH) [12PP]

• DAP: Super-Strength 6 (Maximum lifting strength 60; Heavy load: ) [12PP]

Communication 5 (radio, 5 mile radius) [5DP]

Enhanced Attack 4 [8DP] (targeting system)

Enhanced Feats 5 (Accurate Attack, Attack Focus [melee] 2, Move-By Action, Power Attack) [5DP] (targeting systems)

Immunity 9 (life support) [9DP] (sealed environment)

Protection 6 (Extras: Impervious 10) [16DP] (armour plating)

Shield 6 [6DP] ("INCOMING!")
Super-Senses 10 (Blindsight [radio; Extended], Direction Sense, Distance Sense, Infravision, Radio, Time Sense) [10DP]

Drawbacks: -4PP

Normal Identity (full-round to don suit, Frequency: common, Intensity: major) [-4PP]

DC Block

ATTACK              RANGE             SAVE                           EFFECT
Unarmed             Touch             DC 25 Toughness                Damage
Energy Blast        Ranged            DC 25 Toughness (Autofire)     Damage
Missiles            Ranged (Area)     DC 17/22 Reflex/Toughness      Damage
Flamethrower        Touch  (Area)     DC 20/25 Reflex/Toughness      Damage

Totals: Abilities (22) + Combat (16) + Saving Throws (14) + Skills (15) + Feats (6) + Powers (81) - Drawbacks (4) = 150/150 Power Points

Archer
Power Level: 10 (150/150PP)
Trade-Offs: +4 Attack / -4 Damage, +4 Defense / -4 Toughness

In Brief: No powers, just a bow, a quiver, and a lot of nerve.

"Call Kenny Loggins, 'cause you're in the Danger Zone"

Powers & Tactics:

Powers? This build doesn't need powers. All it has is one Device, a bow & arrow. With it, he can throw down a variety of effects, from being skilled enough to shoot multiple arrows at multiple people, or being prepared enough to carry a fire extinguisher in an arrow (although it's best to keep that one as a power stunt). You're at your best engaging at range, using your vast utility. You can't go blow for blow with Omega, but you can definitely cover his visor with some form of adhesive arrow goo. You also, while not to the level of people aping Batman over Green Arrow, have a wide and varied skillbase. You can track people, you can drive pursuit vehicles, you know your city. 

On the sheet, there is one other superpower, but ultimately, what that allows you to do is not automatically miss attack rolls on a 1. It's less probability control, and more being that supremely good, to be able to hit whatever you aim at. You don't miss. They might be able to dodge quicker than you aim, but you will hit where you aim.

Fun fact: A beard is a superpower which costs 0PP

Complications:
"I'm Out!": Mutants & Masterminds is not a granular system, it doesn't track ammunition, so running out of it is a Complication at best. And when you're a man with a leather bag of sticks, it's never more relevant than in this situation. You might need to make like Legolas and wander around the aftermath of Helm's Deep looking for your old arrows and hoping they're not all broken.

Customisation:

The most obvious thing to do to make this build your own is simple: switch out the trick arrows. You could swap them out for ones you prefer, or just get rid of them and have the more simple arrow-based powers left in the Device, freeing up points for other things. I deliberately overloaded this build with trick arrows to emphasise the sheer versatility of the trick bow, so cutting it down a bit is no big deal!

I've also built this archer very much to be Green Arrow, not Batman, or "We Couldn't Get Batman's Rights So Here's Green Arrow" like the CW and Smallville have done in the past. So you could switch out the more dashing elements for some Stealth and Intimidate. 


Abilities: 6 + 12 + 4 + 0 + 10 + 8 = 40PP
Strength: 16 (+3)
Dexterity: 22 (+6)
Constitution: 14 (+2)
Intelligence: 10 (+0)
Wisdom: 20 (+5)
Charisma: 18 (+4)


Combat: 18 + 16 = 34PP
Initiative: +10
Attack: +14 Bows, +12 Ranged, +9 Base
Defense: +14 (+8 Base, +6 Dodge Focus), +4 Flat-Footed

Grapple: +12
Knockback: -3/-1


Saving Throws: 4 + 5 + 2 = 9PP
Toughness: +6/+2 (+2 Con, +4 Defensive Roll)
Fortitude: +6 (+2 Con, +4)
Reflex: +11 (+6 Dex, +5)
Will: +7 (+5 Wis, +2)


Skills: 96R = 24PP

Acrobatics 9 (+15)

Bluff 11 (+15))
Drive 9 (+15)

Gather Information 6 (+10)

Knowledge [Streetwise] 10 (+10)

Knowledge [Tactics] 10 (+10)

Language 2 (Mandarin, Russian, native: English)

Notice 15 (+20)

Search 10 (+10)

Sense Motive 10 (+15)

Stealth 4 (+10)

Feats: 26PP

Accurate Attack

Attack Focus (Ranged) 3

Attack Specialization (Bows) 1

Challenge 2 (Fast Feint, Improved Taunt)

Defensive Roll 2 (+4 Toughness)

Dodge Focus 6

Evasion

Improved Initiative

Luck 2

Master Plan 2

Power Attack

Precise Shot

Quick Draw
Taunt

Ultimate Aim

Powers: 2 + 15 = 17PP

Archery Supremacy 1 (Probability Control, Flaws: Limited 2 [Archery]) [2pp] (training)

Device 5 (Bow and trick arrows; 25PP device, Flaws: Easy to Lose) [15PP] (bow, technology, training)

Bow And Trick Arrows Array 9 (18PP array, Power Feats: Alternate Power 7) [25DP]

• BE: Blast 3 (PFs: Improved Critical, Improved Range [75' increment], Mighty 3, Progression [750' maximum range]) [12PP] (standard arrows)

• AP:  Blast 3 (Extras: Targetted Area - Shapeable [6], Selective Attack [6], Flaws: Action - Full, Distracting; PFs: Improved Range [75' increment], Mighty 3, Progression [750' maximum range]) [17PP] (rain of arrows)

• AP: Dazzle 6 (sticky goo in the face)

• AP: Drain Toughness 6 (Extras: Affects Objects Only, Ranged) [12PP] LINKED to Blast 6 (Flaws: Limited to electronics only) [6PP] [18PP] (EMP arrow)

• AP: Obscure 6 (visual and olfactory, 250' radius; Extras: Independent) [18pp] (smoke arrows)

• AP: Snare 6 (Extras: Constricting) [18PP] (lasso arrow)

• AP: Super-Movement 4 (Slow Fall, Swinging, Wall Crawling 2) [8PP]and Speed 1 (10MPH) [1PP] [total 9PP] (grappling line arrow)

• AP: Trip 6 (Extras: Area - Burst, Duration 2 - Sustained, Independent, Opposed by Dexterity, Flaws: Distracting) [18PP] (oil slick arrow)

DC Block

ATTACK              RANGE      SAVE                           EFFECT
Unarmed             Touch      DC 18 Toughness                Damage
Arrow Blast         Ranged     DC 21 Toughness                Damage
Arrow Goo           Ranged     DC 16 Reflex/Fortitude         Blinded
EMP                 Ranged     DC 16 Reflex/DC21 Toughness    Drain Toughness, Damage
Snare               Ranged     DC 16 Reflex                   Entangled, Bound
Trip                Area       Opposed Rank 6 vs Dexterity    Prone

Totals: Abilities (40) + Combat (34) + Saving Throws (9) + Skills (24) + Feats (26) + Powers (17) - Drawbacks (0) = 150/150 Power Points

I have decided to revise my old archetypes thread, starting fresh and anew. I tend not to go into very specific builds, I prefer to build broad archetypes with an eye for people to pick them up, alter a couple of things they don't like for a couple of things they do like, and play them! Alternately, do the same for an adversary. I don't care.

Index of Builds:

PL10

Archer: Badass Normal with a bevy of trick arrows and badass aim

Battlesuit: Guns. Lots of guns. And some Black Sabbath.

Paragon: Defender of truth, justice and freedom.

Arrowhawk II

All That Glitters (3)

Out Of/In To (4)

+ Ref PP

Arrownitiative: 1d20+8 9

She was expecting someone else!

Arrowhawk frowned as she examined the evidence. What was going on? Was he tracking the mob? But if so, why was he meeting with them? And why had someone lured that woman to the false apartment? It would be a good way to find and silence witnesses for a shooting, but the men had taken them to the headquarters of the Hammer of Justice. She could barely believe it. Was the Hammer of Justice in on it? Was he trying to silence witnesses? There was only one way to find out. And she'd decided to find him anyway, hadn't she? 

She made her way to the rooftop, looking up at the sky. With slow, steady movements, she drew and nocked an arrow, firing it vertically up into the air. At the apex of its ascent, the arrow exploded and splintered with a bright flash of fire and light. "HAMMER!" Arrowhawk roared to the night. "I HAVE NEED OF A WORD!"

Let me know if it needs a power stunt, but she's just going to shoot a flaming arrow up and shout

Notice check: 1d20+9 13 and a Search check: 1d10+1 10

Woopsie

Arrowhawk reacted, but not quite in time. Her eyes going wide, but not having the chance to even gasp, she turned in the narrow gap she'd forced in the doorway, feeling a sharp stinging pain on the side of her face, and some short sharp impacts, feeling spikes gouge into her armour, some of them being turned aside and clattering to the floor, some embedding themselves in the plating.

"<Odin's blood,>" cursed Osla, stepping through into the base, eyes quickly taking in the scope and scale of the room. Maps, computer equipment, a gym... this very much resembled her own headquarters. Whose was this? Who went to the trouble of outfitting such a base, and luring innocent people to it to kidnap them in such a way? She carefully began to look closer across the room, looking for some clue as to whose base of operations this was.

Dodge the spikes, aaaaah: 1d20+8 18

Fail to dodge the spikes, aaaah!

Spiky pain: 1d20+8 28 Woooo, Batsuit

Arrowhawk looked up at where Luthor was pointing, not even questioning his sudden display of metahuman abilities. Where she came from such displays were commonplace. "That may actually be a tactically sounder option." She nodded. "Then let us draw them out to battle us under an open sky!"

She strode forward before dropping to one knee a good few feet in front of the gates. She nocked an arrow and drew it back loosely, pointing it to the ground a little before her, instead of towards the factory doors. "If need be, we can attempt to damage their vehicles and fall back to retreat in yours. But I am confident we will win this day."

Arrowhawk stalked into the passage, dimly lit by the low light. She softly laid her feet into the disturbed dust, following in the footsteps with those to have previously entered, avoiding whatever traps may be left for interlopers. But she knew she was on the right track by the door in front of her.

She planted her feet firmly to brace herself, before planting her hands on the frame next to the keypad. Summoning up all her strength, and that in Fenrir's Gauntlets, she began to pull. Sweat beaded on Arrowhawk's forehead, but the edges of the door began to pull towards her, and she managed to get a stronger grip on the door. From there it was much easier, heaving the door towards herself, distorting the metal slowly but firmly until an opening wide enough to pass through was formed.

Arrowhawk is going to try to rip the door open.

Being Captain America: 1d20+7 14

Well, she has 4 HP, so let's drop it down to 3 HP with a reroll.

Being more America: 1d20+7 11, +10 = 21

Arrowhawk slid out of the truck bed, doing a quick weapons check. She had a full quiver, her axe was sharp enough, and her bow-string was kept in tip-top shape as if by magic. Restowing her armament, she looked the structure up and down. "Do not forget we need to leave at least one or two able to talk rather than subduing all of their forces. We will be incredibly outnumbered." Her voice sounded amused, and her teeth were bared in an enthusiastic grin. 

She turned to the siblings. "I suggest one of two approaches. You merely go in to talk, I go in cloaked behind you in case they attempt to use force or deception against you. The alternative is..." Arrowhawk lightly tossed her bow up in the air, letting it arc in a full circle before snatching it back into her hand. "We attempt to fight our way through, come what may."

I don't have much to add, mainly because I'm tired, and luckily the discussion has gone, but I do have one point.

I am generally, while not necessarily wanting it at the expense of PCs, quite like the fact it's not a generic setting and there's other stuff going on, so I am firmly in the "keep some NPC members" camp. Especially Daedalus, who due to his Resurrection and trips into space often gets put up as a candidate for getting rid of despite being the easiest to integrate. You can relegate him to exposition and an easy Equipment justification, so I'd argue for his inclusion over all as opposed to where these discussions, although not the last few posts, always go in aiming to get rid of him first  Or, to sum my notion up in one letter, he's Q. I also like the idea of Montoya going off to be a more space-focused Knight like how the Justice League titles handle swapping out what Lantern they have.

I am, however, against Bowman running a government team because I don't know how much sense it makes for the whole Bowman legacy to suddenly be pro-establishment? Although for a more governmental team, perhaps SHIELD forms a specific Freedom League analogue of its own, sort of like the Ultimate/MCU Avengers not being initially privately funded.

Arrowhawk looked a little closer, tilting her head silently in thought. Eventually she reached out, lightly tapping the screen with her finger over one of the men, his sleeves rolled up over the elbow. "Their tattoos, they match." She tapped at another man's similar ink. "Maybe it is some company or band using this factory as their base camp. I see no other reason why their markings would be so similar to one another."

She glanced at the two siblings. "Is that plausible? I am not familiar with organisations of this nature and their manners of operating." Osla didn't particularly know much about Midgard street gangs, but her father had mentioned their prevalence in the manner of crime he often combated.

This room was discomfiting. Clearly, no one lived here. Surely, no one could stand to. This was an approximation, a ruse of domesticity. The fruit not even real, the bed untouched. But who would go to such effort to make such a room? And to such pains to secure the door? To stage interviews for an assault? This all seemed very contrived. 

Arrowhawk decided to take Zelda's advice, and walked up to the coffee table, and the bust upon it. Not sure by what device this would open the hidden door in the bookcases, she resolved to simply roughly backhand it with a heavy degree of force.

For Ecalsneerg,

Explanation: I got really drunk and went to see a sweet transvestite from transsexual Transylvania and missed the deadline

Arrowhawk II

All that Glitters (5)

Out Of/Into (7)

12 posts = 1PP, +1 Ref PP = +2PP

Equinox would be up for it. 

Notice check: 1d20+9 22

Knowledge! ... Theology: 1d20+5 6 Woopsie

Look, Osla is more of a fighter than a detective. Unless Track works, which I doubt  I'll roll anyway: Survival: 1d20+10 17

I'm fine with it

Arrowhawk peered curiously into the cab of the pickup truck. She'd have to learn to operate one some day, they looked fun. It was also a welcome distraction from the expression on the faces of those inside. It shouldn't inspire such fear, the idea of even being met by the authorities. "They will not come around. The officer did not even care," Osla said matter-of-factly.

She fixed her gaze on Luthor, although she addressed both of them. "The only hope there is of finding the store owner is with the disc you have. The police won't look for him, and I can't access what's on it. What I need isn't a ride, but your help."