JediDalek

That makes sense. The book says going over 15 makes you one of the best in the world, so someone starting out probably wouldn't have anything higher than that, anyway. I do find the idea of a character with over 15 ranks in Pop Culture kind of funny, though. They just spend too much time on Reddit... Haha.

Okay, this was a bit more in-depth than my last revision, so let's see if I remember everything: I balanced out his attack and damage by taking some points out of strength, since I felt balace made sense for this character. The only reason I put his strength that high in the first place was because of a misunderstanding I had about how strong his inspiration character was. I tried to similarly balance out the saves, favoring reflex a little more and will a little less, since I see the character as agile but maybe not the most disciplined. I switched out some of the feats and consolidated the cyborg stuff into a container as you suggested. I decided to drop the stingers as a concept entirely, since I realized that he had them more as a justification for his name than for anything I actually planned on doing. With the points from that, I added Power Attack to his armor for the same effect the stingers had, and used the remaining points to add a couple movement powers to the armor, and to fix up my skills a little. I decided I did want to focus on Dex skills, as driving crazy and jumping really high are things I want to do. While I didn't see any rule against having skills over 20, I couldn't find many active characters who did, and reasoned that if some of these super-knowledgable characters only have academic knowledge up to 20, then I should probably not go beyond that. Overall, I realized a few of my problems came from the fact that I completely wrote his backstory, and then statted around that instead of trying to make the two grow naturally together.

Alright, thanks. I did what you guys suggested/said, cleaned up the brackets and evened out my abilities, sticking the extra point into Melee Focus. I also fixed my Attack & Grapple numbers, since I think there were some miscalculations in there, and re-worded some fluff to sound less like I wrote it at 4:00 AM. And the caps situation makes sense, you definitely don't want to be the "less competent sidekick" guy. I tried looking at a few other "punch/kick-ey" characters in the bank to make sure I was in their vicinity. And yeah. Haha. I was born in Springfield, so KC was a good compromise for someplace I know but am not personally from.

Okay, I dropped a few powers/skills that he didn't really need, and used those points tor bring up the Attack & Defense bonuses. Am I doing this right?

Alright, cool. I think I can move some points around to help the Attack & Defense. Just for future reference, are the minimums I need to hit here a hard thing that I missed in the rules, or more of just a thing where I'll have a bad time if I go out with less than that? Also, glad to see some KR appreciation. I was worried everyone would think I was trying to shoehorn in a power ranger or something. Haha.

Alright, here he is: my first FCPbP character! I think I got everything mostly right, but I figured it'd be smart to run it by some people who know stuff before submitting it to the Character Bank. Also, I normally wouldn't draw character art, but HeroFactory wasn't giving me what I wanted. Player Name: JediDalek Character Name: The Blue Stinger Power Level: 10 (150PP) Trade-Offs: None Unspent Power Points: 0 Progress To Bronze Status: 0/30 In Brief: Danny Randall is a wisecracking college student who was forcibly converted into a cyborg assassin by a rogue SHADOW scientist. Escaping before he could be conditioned into a killer, he now fights a war of vengeance against SHADOW's secret conspiracies as the Blue Stinger. Residence: Freedom City, NJ. (Attending Freedom College) Base of Operations:Freedom City, Southside. Living off-campus in a low-rent apartment. Catchphrase: “Stinger Strike!!!” Alternate Identity: Danny Randall Identity: Secret Birthplace: Kansas City, MO Occupation: Student, part time server at Sparrow's Cafe Affiliations: Nattie "Sparrow” Stuarts: Boss and sometimes mother figure. Also a retired bronze-age superheroine. Samantha Krieger: Friend and former partner in following the trail of Dr. Gruber. Currently missing. Family: Mother & Father (Both died when he was 18) Description: Age: 21 (DoB: May 2, 1994) Gender: Male Ethnicity: Caucasian Height: 5' 8” Weight: 167 Lbs. Eyes: Green Hair: Brown For the most part, Danny looks like an average slacker college kid, favoring dark colored jeans and t-shirts with the occasional plaid shirt. He is fairly skinny, and his brown hair is often medium length and disheveled. Personality wise, he is quiet but friendly, usually watching the crowd while keeping to himself with a slouched, unassuming posture. In costume, he is covered almost from head to toe in a blue & black battle suit, with a buglike helmet that alludes to his origin as the result of the Red Scorpion's research, and a lighter blue scarf tied around his neck. He is more confident in this form, and carries himself in a more upright manner. This confidence also leads him to be much more talkative and more lighthearted in general. When in battle with a supervillain that threatens others, however, his personality changes yet again and he becomes more aggressive as his heart begins to burn with the righteous flames of justice. Power Descriptions: One of the only visible manifestations of Danny's power is his transformation into the Blue Stinger. The Stinger battlesuit is normally compacted into a disc sized unit that sits discreetly on the user's back, small enough to be hidden under normal clothing. Upon the activation of a mental or verbal trigger, the battlesuit decompresses and assembles over the user's body. Due to the electromagnetic field that surrounds this armor, there is a noticeable "spark" effect when it recieves damage. History: When Danny Randall was 18, his parents died in what everyone told him was a random car accident. His journalist father had been looking into the shady dealings of a local business magnate for the last month and while there wasn't much in the way of an investigation, Danny was old enough to put two & two together. With nothing left for him in the Midwest, he decided to move as far away as possible, as soon as he could. Growing up in a world full of aliens and superbeings, Danny had always been fascinated with the science behind such amazing events and his Science grades, while not as good as some, were good enough to get him enrolled into Freedom College. In Freedom, Danny kept mostly to himself, never one to make friends easily. After a month of near complete solitude, he finally found himself in Sparrow's Cafe. The Cafe was run by Nattie Stuarts, formerly known as "The Spectacular Sparrow", a retired crimefighter who decided she could do more by giving the kids of Southside a safe place to spend their afternoon than by punching crooks in the face. When a lost and empty Danny walked into he place, she could tell he needed a hand. After a few minutes of talking she decided he was a good kid, and gave him a job at the cafe. Over time, she would become an important figure in his life, giving him advice and motivating him to push himself. She even taught him a thing or two about fighting when business would slow. For two years, he subsisted through college, studying Engineering and working at the cafe. His life was destined to change, though, during the summer before his Junior year, when a panicked girl caught him outside his apartment, telling him that someone was following her and she needed a place to hide. She introduced herself as Samantha Krieger, granddaughter of a German supervillain known only as “The Red Scorpion” who was said to have created the plans for a cyborg supersoldier. After his defection to the US near the end of the war, any trace of said project seemed to have disappeared with him, until 3 weeks ago, when a group of thieves broke into Samantha's home and stole a few heirloom paintings. She was certain that those paintings somehow contained the last secrets of her grandfather's research, and that whoever stole those paintings was someone with an eye on finishing her grandfather's work, someone with a lot of resources at their disposal. When she began to notice certain faces following her around town, her suspicions were merely confirmed. Danny always hated a bully, be they the pushy jerks in high school or the “untouchable” businessman who felt that his checking account was more important than the lives of a loving mother & father. Whoever wanted to silence this girl was just more of the same, and Danny wasn't going to let them win again. They became good friends after that, as they slowly edged closer and closer to the truth, constantly evading these mysterious "bad guys". After two months, they finally had a lead. The pair follwed a clue into an abandoned warehouse in the Waterfront... and into the clutches of one Dr Elias Gruber, a former compatriot of Samantha's grandfather who had taken on his mantle, now working for SHADOW to create an army of cyborg assassins. Struggle as they might, the two could not overcome his personal detachment of SHADOW agents. The last Danny saw of Samantha, the two of them were both being dragged away as test subjects for Gruber's new endeavor: Project SCORPIO. When Danny finally awoke, he discovered that he was no longer fully human, his skeleton and most of his organs replaced by machines that enhanced his strength, speed and stamina, and clad in a strange, bug-like armor. Restrained and imprisoned, all that was left was the mental conditioning that would destroy his identity and leave him a loyal minion of the new Red Scorpion. But then, as all seemed lost, the hidden base had a power failure. Danny seized his chance and escaped, his new powers giving him the strength to fight off his guards. Danny searched the base for Samantha, but all he could find was the blue scarf she'd been wearing. Gruber had escaped, and seemingly taken her with him. Danny left the destroyed base with a new purpose on his mind. Tying the scarf over his armor as a reminder, he pledged to fight evil, be it Gruber or more of his kind. Some day, he would save Samantha and redeem her grandfather's image as the Blue Stinger. Personality & Motivation: For most of his life, Danny has seen people he cares about be pushed around by those with more power. Now that he has the strength to fight back, he has little patience for anyone who would hurt the weak, and will fight them with unwavering ferocity, and a passion that only a very green superhero could muster. Danny has been through quite a few dark situations by this point, and would have every reason to be very grim. Despite this, he was raised to see the good side of things, and to appreciate good humor. Because of this, he always tries to behave in a light-hearted and optimistic manner, constantly making jokes and quips. Even so, the reality of a bad situation some times dawns on him, allowing a little cynicism to permeate his humor. Before gaining his powers, Danny led a fairly uneventful life. He would often try to escape this boredom through reckless street driving in less populace areas, becoming something of an adrenaline junkie, even dabbling in free running before returning to his love of the road. Gaining enhanced durability and reflexes has merely raised the bar for what he considers excitement, and he can often be seen racing his bike through the city at breakneck speeds. Powers & Tactics: The cyborg conversion gave Danny increased strength, speed and durability, as well as enhanced sight & hearing. He also posesses a unique set of battle armor, meant to be the standard for what would have been SCORPIO assassins. The armor compacts into a small unit which attaches to a coupling unit in his back, allowing it to be "summoned" by mental command. The armor produces a light magnetic field that allows the wearer to stick to most surfaces, in addition to absorbing forces such as the impact of a long fall, or limited amounts of damage. Through mental effort, this field can be briefly concentrated in either the hands or feet for a single, powerful attack. While he lacks much in the way of formal combat training, the Blue Stinger attempts to compensate by virtue of his incredible speed & strength, fighting with a mixture of pro wrestling moves and “things he saw in a movie one time”. In line with this sense of the dramatic, Stinger is quite fond of delivering flying kicks or elbow drops from high buildings. While very unorthodox, this approach has caught at least a few super villains off guard. Complications: Cyborg Human: As a result of project SCORPIO, Danny is both man and machine, and feels as though he has lost some of his humanity. In social situations, this may cause him to suffer penalties due to a loss of empathy either from himself, or from those who know about his condition. Enemies (SHADOW/Red Scorpion): The mad doctor who captured Danny was working for SHADOW. He had the resources to lead Sam & Danny into his trap, so it is only a matter of time before he finds out Danny's secret identity and relays it to his masters. In addition, they would seem to have Samantha captive, and Danny would do just about anything to get her back safe. “Hey, I Have An Idea...”: Danny is the product of a generation weaned on TV and action movies and, even for a super hero, he sometimes gets ideas that just aren't feasible in real life. Any time Danny is faced with a fairly simple problem, he can be made to take a much more complicated and difficult approach to solving it, preferably one that has the potential to fail horribly. Hot Blooded: Danny has a particular hatred for “bullies”; anyone who uses their power to hurt others who can't defend themselves. He will fight these forces, even if severely outmatched. If he witnesses any kind of bullying or oppression, the GM can force him to step in. In addition, he will never willingly flee from such a fight unless he makes a very difficult willpower roll. Legacy of The Scorpion: Danny hasn't been the Blue Stinger long, and is still making a name for himself. Since his armor was originally crafted in the image of a Golden Age supervillain, however, those familiar with the Red Scorpion might know just enough to jump to all the wrong conclusions and treat him as a villain until he is able to clear things up. They Can't All Be Zingers: As any comedian will tell you, for every funny joke you tell, there is always the crushing silence after that one joke misses its mark. During any social situation, the GM can make Danny tell a joke that is very stupid and either offends someone or somehow diminishes their opinion of him. (He will, however, never use any humor that goes against site rules eg. no sexual/racial slurs, no "R-rated" jokes, etc. He can be ignorant, but he's not a jerk.) Wouldn't Hit a Lady: Danny feels a great amount of guilt over leading Samantha into the clutches of SHADOW. Coupled with a somewhat “old-school” upbringing, this causes him to have moral compunctions about deliberately causing harm to females. Whenever he is in a fight with a female opponent, the GM can ask him to make a willpower roll to make the first blow, and give him a penalty to the rest of his attack rolls against that opponent. Abilities: 0 + 8 + 4 + 4 + 0 + 2 = 18PP Strength: 30/10 (+10/+0) Dexterity: 28/18 (+9/+4) Constitution: 22/14 (+6/+2) Intelligence: 14 (+2) Wisdom: 10 (+0) Charisma: 12 (+1) Combat: 8 + 20 = 28PP Initiative: +9 Attack: +4 Base, +10 Melee (4 Base + 6 Focus), +4 Ranged Grapple: +20 Defense: +10 (+10 Base, +0 Dodge Focus), +5 Flat-Footed Knockback: -5/-3 Saving Throws: 2 + 1 + 6 = 9PP Toughness: +10/+6 (+6 Con, +4 from Device/Battle Armor) Fortitude: +8 (+6 Con, +2) Reflex: +10 (+9 Dex, +1) Will: +6 (+0 Wis, +6) Skills: 104R = 26PP Acrobatics 11 (+20) Skill Mastery Bluff 15 (+16) Skill Mastery Craft, Mechanical 11 (+13) Diplomacy 8 (+9) Drive 11 (+20) Skill Mastery Knowledge, Physical Science 12 (+14) Knowledge, Pop Culture 15 (+17) Notice 10 (+10) Stealth 11(+20) Skill Mastery Feats: 17PP Accurate Attack Acrobatic Bluff All Out Attack Attack Focus: Melee 6 Elusive Target Equipment 2 Fearless Improved Initiative 2 Power Attack (Device Feat) Quick Change (Device Feat) Skill Mastery (Acrobatics, Bluff, Drive, Stealth) Taunt Equipment: 2PP = 10EP Motorcycle (15 Str, 5 Spd, 10 Def, 8 Tough) [9EP] Powers: 8 + 8 + 10 + 20 + 4 + 1 + 1 = 52PP Device 1: [8PP] (10PP Container, Hard to Lose) (Battle Armor) Protection 4 [4PP] Super Movement 2 [2PP] (Slow Fall, Wall-Crawling) Feats: Power Attack, Quick Change [2PP] Cyborg Human 8.8: (44PP Container [Passive, Permanent]) [44PP] (Technological) Enhanced Constitution 8: [8PP] Enhanced Dexterity 10: [10PP] Enhanced Strength 20: [20PP] Immunity 4: [4PP] (Vaccum, High Pressure, Suffocation) Super Senses 2: [2PP] (Extended Hearing 1, Infravision) Drawbacks: (-0) + (-0) = -0PP DC Block ATTACK RANGE SAVE EFFECT Unarmed Touch DC20 Toughness (Staged) Damage (Physical) Stinger Strike (Power Attack) Touch DC25 Toughness (Staged) Damage (Physical) Totals: Abilities (18) + Combat (28) + Saving Throws (9) + Skills (26) + Feats (17) + Powers (52) - Drawbacks (0) = 150/150 Power Points Concept: At his core, the Blue Stinger is in no small part inspired by the Kamen Rider series' with a little bit of Spider-Man. More specifically, he is inspired by the Showa Era (Pre 1990's) riders, who were all cyborgs and overall felt a little more "Silver Age" in their stories. Ultimately, my idea was to take the typical Showa Rider, and portray him as seen through the lens of 1970's Marvel Comics.

Hi, everyone! I just joined the site, and this looked like a good place to say "Hi" before getting to work on my first character. So, my name is Patrick, I'm 21, and am currently living in Colorado, where I am in the process of transferring from my old college in Iowa. Kind of having an existential crisis outside of that, but I'm studying Film, and Japanese at the moment, so I hope I can turn those into something. Haha. I haven't been into RPG's as long as some, but I dove in head-first when I finally had a chance. My brother & I dabbled in Shadowrun, but my first real game was a Dnd 3.5 game with some friends I knew from our campus Karate Club. From there, I got into games such as Star Wars, Savage Worlds, 2nd Edition AdnD, World of Darkness, and of course MnM. I bought a 2nd Edition MnM book a couple years ago which I haven't had the chance to run a game with, but instead pored over until I had the rules locked away in my noggin, so I'm excited to finally put those to good use. My main hobbies are video game collecting (favorite systems are the Sega Dreamcast and Panasonic 3DO) and finding new RPG systems to mess with. I've had a lifelong fixation on superheroes that began with Power Rangers and the 90's Spider Man cartoon when I was a kid, and continues today in the form of my growing comic collection and interest in all the superhero films that are coming out lately. I've also got a thing for Japanese culture (though not as much anime as you might think), and really love Japanese sci fi movies. You may have noticed I am a little scattered. Currently Playing: Tony Hawk's Pro Skater 2 Currently Watching: Daredevil (2nd time through) Currently Reading: Spider-Verse & Wheel of Time